First draft of Unhinged and Feedback.

Feedback:

We received feedback from the class, we had some criticism however, I believe this is a good thing due to being able to improve the trailer. Having other peoples opinions makes it easier to know whether it is a successful piece of work.

Good

·     Black and white flashback scene. The audience enjoyed this because it clearly identifies the use of a memory. This is effective because it gives some background knowledge of the characters.            

     

      Sound track:  It was stated that the non-diegetic music we used fitted the trailer well. It helped the footage flow and suited the genre. The audience liked the gradual slow pace leading to a more fast speed. This is a stereotypical convention of a thriller/horror genre for trailers.

     

      Closing screens: The audience like these due to it looking "professional" with the suitable information such as the film title and release date. This is also a stereotypical convention we have used.

k    Good structure: Our trailer is structured correctly with all the information making sense in time order. It shows we have thought about where each scene and shot should be located. It helped the narrative make more sense.

·     Range of shots and settings: Our settings were good due to a range of settings being a convention of a film trailer. It makes it more interesting instead of it being based in one setting. The shots were also good such as the shot reverse shot and the close up of the knife.

Improvements

·     Inter-titles look too clip arty- The audience did not enjoy the intertitles. The intertitles slide across the screen. There is also the use of a red shadow behind the titles. These were viewed as 'clip art' which suggests it does not look professional.

·     Increase pace after 47 seconds: This is because the end shots does not flow with the non-diegetic music. The cuts need to be faster to be at the same pace as the music. This will make it more like a trailer and more interesting and 'thrilling'.

·     Leave close-up on eyes on for longer: The close up on the eyes are not on the screen for long enough. Leaving it on for a second or two longer will imply he is shocked and the audience will be able to see the shot clearly.

·     Lower music volumes in therapy room: The non-diegetic music is too loud in the therapy room and the audience struggled to hear what was being said in the shot reverse shot.

·     Make the narrative clearer e.g. child abuse: The intertitles such as 'Three stages' did not make sense to the audience. Also it was suggested to include an intertitle about the flashback such as 'A corrupt childhood' or ' An alcoholic father'. This will make the narrative and the low angle shot more clear.

·     Lower brightness of therapy room: The therapy room is too bright when it should be low key to make the audience feel weary about the Dr and going to therapy is not a happy thing.